tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6323534633493086556.post6622710697947983281..comments2023-07-09T01:34:31.407-07:00Comments on Bloggit Write: Dark Alley (Trifecta)k~http://www.blogger.com/profile/17308736457276683273noreply@blogger.comBlogger36125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6323534633493086556.post-50430253488165312172012-06-15T10:47:55.418-07:002012-06-15T10:47:55.418-07:00Thank you Jessie. It is stronger than just blood, ...Thank you Jessie. It is stronger than just blood, or even deep dark blood... I appreciate you coming by to read it and respond.k~https://www.blogger.com/profile/17308736457276683273noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6323534633493086556.post-79115518053998771092012-06-15T10:47:14.095-07:002012-06-15T10:47:14.095-07:00Thank you, the setting was imperative if I was goi...Thank you, the setting was imperative if I was going to be able to pull this off in 33 words.k~https://www.blogger.com/profile/17308736457276683273noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6323534633493086556.post-16712674709564903292012-06-15T09:10:53.288-07:002012-06-15T09:10:53.288-07:00YES -- soul-blood is an excellent description. I l...YES -- soul-blood is an excellent description. I like how it captures the idea of not just the loss of life, but the loss of identity.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6323534633493086556.post-47778521768836537722012-06-15T03:36:26.562-07:002012-06-15T03:36:26.562-07:00Thanks for linking up with Trifecta this week. In...Thanks for linking up with Trifecta this week. In your short piece, there's a lot to love. But for me, it's the first two lines that seal the deal. I, too, like the short, choppy nature of this piece. It keeps you on your toes, which is exactly where you should be for a place like this. Hope to see you back soon.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6323534633493086556.post-33676650548044588372012-06-14T21:24:53.127-07:002012-06-14T21:24:53.127-07:00Thank you for letting me know what parts spoke to ...Thank you for letting me know what parts spoke to you, it's helpful :-)k~https://www.blogger.com/profile/17308736457276683273noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6323534633493086556.post-74879036680952825312012-06-14T21:02:42.943-07:002012-06-14T21:02:42.943-07:00I'm with Lance - I love the "soul blood m...I'm with Lance - I love the "soul blood mingled with asphalt." I also *really* love the image of "night fenced in brick." Gorgeous.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6323534633493086556.post-69153845643659582052012-06-14T19:38:14.267-07:002012-06-14T19:38:14.267-07:00Thank you Carrie, I love the word malevolent! :-)Thank you Carrie, I love the word malevolent! :-)k~https://www.blogger.com/profile/17308736457276683273noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6323534633493086556.post-43101635436898593812012-06-14T19:23:29.065-07:002012-06-14T19:23:29.065-07:00Dark and creepy. You've made this alley into a...Dark and creepy. You've made this alley into a malevolent force.Carriehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03472645003197467754noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6323534633493086556.post-79740841961876418972012-06-14T08:24:36.585-07:002012-06-14T08:24:36.585-07:00Now that is figurative language at work! :-) Thank...Now that is figurative language at work! :-) Thank you for peeking in. Your feedback is important to me.k~https://www.blogger.com/profile/17308736457276683273noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6323534633493086556.post-78017560534692021702012-06-14T08:23:38.121-07:002012-06-14T08:23:38.121-07:00Thank you El Guapo. I appreciate the input.Thank you El Guapo. I appreciate the input.k~https://www.blogger.com/profile/17308736457276683273noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6323534633493086556.post-63324620578185087392012-06-14T08:21:48.296-07:002012-06-14T08:21:48.296-07:00I went over to your place to read about your cardb...I went over to your place to read about your cardboard houses. It was a nice way to see what can happen when two very different worlds collide.k~https://www.blogger.com/profile/17308736457276683273noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6323534633493086556.post-17841081891570786472012-06-14T07:32:39.969-07:002012-06-14T07:32:39.969-07:00This is so crisp. I understood everything about t...This is so crisp. I understood everything about the alley. I felt the temperature. I could see the light. I could smell the death. Great job!Jen Has A Penhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01985462114936261199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6323534633493086556.post-12788797955435885002012-06-14T06:25:21.104-07:002012-06-14T06:25:21.104-07:00The sharp images of an alley at night, with no liv...The sharp images of an alley at night, with no living component besides the gunshots and blood made this very powerful to me.<br /><br />I'd forgotten how skilled the trifecta crowd was!ElGuapohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10036373233968238854noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6323534633493086556.post-12087089644246747292012-06-14T05:37:44.956-07:002012-06-14T05:37:44.956-07:00I also wrote about cardboard houses, although your...I also wrote about cardboard houses, although your piece is much more haunting and will stay with me all morning as I sit in my own home with my creature comforts. Nicely done.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03554662447246962880noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6323534633493086556.post-88754737606085049322012-06-13T21:29:36.420-07:002012-06-13T21:29:36.420-07:00:-) Thank you so much!:-) Thank you so much!k~https://www.blogger.com/profile/17308736457276683273noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6323534633493086556.post-60860662438107908692012-06-13T20:25:54.278-07:002012-06-13T20:25:54.278-07:00Jam-packed and vivid imagery--this IS alley #3--Jam-packed and vivid imagery--this IS alley #3--Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6323534633493086556.post-67831543155369417522012-06-12T20:14:29.353-07:002012-06-12T20:14:29.353-07:00The first alleys I saw were like this one Gina. I ...The first alleys I saw were like this one Gina. I have seen many since then... but this type of image sticks.k~https://www.blogger.com/profile/17308736457276683273noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6323534633493086556.post-22188589559288176042012-06-12T20:13:56.597-07:002012-06-12T20:13:56.597-07:00I do too, for the most part... at least city alley...I do too, for the most part... at least city alleys. When you get into a rural area it is more like a backyard coffee shop ;-)k~https://www.blogger.com/profile/17308736457276683273noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6323534633493086556.post-57066124627683574932012-06-12T19:36:31.130-07:002012-06-12T19:36:31.130-07:00You captured the "way" of some alleys. I...You captured the "way" of some alleys. It's sad but it is reality.Ginahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04841767868797265391noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6323534633493086556.post-520737806652024452012-06-12T18:30:36.146-07:002012-06-12T18:30:36.146-07:00You painted the picture well (and illustrated the ...You painted the picture well (and illustrated the main reason I avoid alleys in even daylight :))Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6323534633493086556.post-23912918780261283962012-06-12T15:24:03.359-07:002012-06-12T15:24:03.359-07:00Oh your name is perfect for this week's challe...Oh your name is perfect for this week's challenge! ;-)<br /><br />Thank you for stopping by.k~https://www.blogger.com/profile/17308736457276683273noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6323534633493086556.post-78669172700091258992012-06-12T15:07:23.194-07:002012-06-12T15:07:23.194-07:00very nice - taut, tense, well-paced
http://uslaym...very nice - taut, tense, well-paced<br /><br />http://uslayme.wordpress.com/2012/06/12/alley-oops-4/Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6323534633493086556.post-8692035235690469832012-06-12T14:36:27.547-07:002012-06-12T14:36:27.547-07:00Thank you for taking the time to read and respond....Thank you for taking the time to read and respond. I appreciate the input.k~https://www.blogger.com/profile/17308736457276683273noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6323534633493086556.post-36305909181205193412012-06-12T14:30:35.037-07:002012-06-12T14:30:35.037-07:00Concise and powerful. The last few lines read cho...Concise and powerful. The last few lines read choppy... each is abrupt. It adds so much to the tone of the piece.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6323534633493086556.post-29940081011691103192012-06-12T12:48:31.246-07:002012-06-12T12:48:31.246-07:00Thank you Tara :-)Thank you Tara :-)k~https://www.blogger.com/profile/17308736457276683273noreply@blogger.com