Master Class is a group of bloggers
who write as a result of the inspiration from given prompts. The prompts
are different each week, but somethings remain the same:
- Use the prompt as a title or within the story.
- Keep it within 700 words.
- Submit it by 6:00 PM EST Sunday
This weeks prompts are:
Slice the pie
Unwelcome reminder
Extraordinary objects of the universe
Here's my development based on the
prompt "Unwelcome Reminder":
Miguel
It was almost midnight when the phone rang. It’s
rarely good news when the phone rings at that time of night, but I held out
hope and picked it up.
“Hey, what’s up scooter butt?”
“It’s late Miguel, what do you want?”
“Whoa, why are you such a stick in the mud? I just
wanted to talk to my long time buddy. Can’t a guy give you a call just to talk?”
It was an unwelcome reminder that there were still
people in my life that were unhealthy, and if I wanted to keep them in my life,
I would have to accept that they were and would continue to be unhealthy.
“What do you want Miguel?”
“Really Sandy, I just want to talk to you.”
“Well, start talking then, I’m tired.”
“Never mind, I would hate to interrupt something
im-por-tant.”
The phone hung up before I could return it to its cradle.
I knew he would call back in a few minutes when he realized I was not going
to, so I took it off the hook. In some cases, anything left unsaid is better
than what might be said.
“Goodnight Miguel.”
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This has the potential to be a much bigger and quite enthralling story. You've successfully weaved the intrigue leaving me wondering why Sandy doesn't want to talk to Miguel. The frustration is obvious and I can actually hear the two voices distinctly when I read, which is fantastic! Thank you for joining in the Master Class this week!
ReplyDeleteThank you for the input SAM. I enjoy working with dialogue, particularly when it feels right. I wasn't sure if it had enough intrigue to carry it out, but you have made me reconsider the possibilities of this story growing.
DeleteThank you for having Class again. :-)
Very believable dialogue, I can hear this happening with many relationships, either as friends or loved ones. I agree with SAM too, this could be the start of a much larger story.
ReplyDeleteThank you Tara for the feedback. That's two writer's whose opinion I respect. Perhaps I will have to sift through this and get to the meat of the story. :-)
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