Blind to the Lie
The night is young and you're feeling old
bored at home, you want something more
Sweet romance, a sexy dance
Thinkin' that you'll take a chance
Secrets swept up under the rug
Over things you're thinking of
When your hearts on fire
and you're blind to the lie
who's your alibi?
While you're out there on the road
Are you thinkin' she's at home?
Shadow creeper, pillow sneaker
open back door window peeper
Mystified, half outta your mind
Whatcha think your gonna find?
When your hearts on fire
and you're blind to the lie
Who's your alibi?
Who's your alibi?
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Nice sounds like a Bonnie Raitt song.
ReplyDeleteIt does... hadn't thought of it that way Fireman ;-)
DeleteVery lyrical. Teh rhyming scheme is playful and naughty.
ReplyDeleteThanks for coming back to see for 100 word song this week, k.
awesome
Thank you Lance, it's a fun challenge for me. "playful and naughty" I love that!
DeleteI like what you did with the prompt. This could be a song on its own.
ReplyDeleteThanks Tara :-)
DeleteLoved it! I agree on Tara's comment above :) Put melody on it :)
ReplyDeleteThank you Feathered one :-)
DeleteLove the word play!
ReplyDeleteAnd I may very well use "The Pillow Sneaker" as my name should I ever become a super hero :)
Thank you T, So what kind of costume does a "Pillow Sneaker" super hero wear?
DeleteI love the lyrical poem you've done here, I agree with previous posters about the Bonnie Raitt song feel. Great job with the prompt!
ReplyDeleteThank you Jenna :-)
DeleteLove the play with the rhythm of the rhyme...smart stuff! And super fun to read aloud...but I'm working a more hiphop vibe when I do.
ReplyDeleteInteresting, that would be a fun twist. I usually write the way I hear it in my head, and there have been very few that I heard as hip-hop right out of the gate. After reading what you wrote, I went back and looked at it again, with "new" eyes and I could hear it! Thanks for a new perspective.
DeleteI know some of the other commenters have said this, but it really does sound like a song to me. I'm a singer and I can "hear" this sung with an acoustic guitar.
ReplyDeleteWell Victoria, I love to write lyrics, so if you feel the muse, put it down, sing it out, and let me hear what you come up with!
DeleteYou definitely have talents beyond most people and it shines through in any post you make. This song should really be published so it can capture it's rightful place as number one on the top hits list. Good work *two thumbs up*
ReplyDeleteAh ya are a kind to say so. :-) Thank you for stopping by and taking a peek!
DeleteThis is a really good song! Well done. Now to set it to music...
ReplyDeleteShannon at The Warrior Muse, co-host of the 2012 #atozchallenge! Twitter: @AprilA2Z
Thank you Shannon, yes, yes, to get the music to it!
DeleteNice of you to stop by... Are you ready for the A-Z challenge?