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Friday, March 30, 2012

Trifexta - Week 10 - Horror in 33 Words


Trifexta Week 10 had a prompt that I just could not resist:

"Write a horror story in 33 words, without the words blood, scream, died, death, knife, gun, or kill. Good luck."


Chalk lines soaked up tiny puddles of crimson where the answers became questions. Mickey knew what happened, but he wasn't sacrificing words, his eyes were glued to the flashing sign across the street.

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  1. This was terrific. Where the answers became question. perfect.

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    1. Ah thank you Kelly. I like some of the others I have seen so much better than this (blushes).

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    1. Thank you Beth... it felt good to be pushed into the blog before Sunday ;-)

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  3. what's over there???? :) good stuff

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    1. Thanks Purple Moose :-) I know, now I want to write about that too! hehehhe

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  4. a) Love the phrase "where the answers became questions" b) I really want to know what happens next (what he's looking at and why)!

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    1. Heheheh... that's fun Janna, maybe I will carry it out across the street. :-)

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  5. Sounds like he's holding all the cards here.

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  6. Th mystery is what's scary. This is great. You told a story in the things you didn;t write. so well done.

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    1. Thanks Lance :-) A little imagination for the mind... I love these prompts!

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  7. I am amazed by people who can say so much in so few words. Fascinating story!

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    1. Thanks KAT, it's a lot of fun, you ought to give it a go!

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  8. First time here, found you at Trifecta. Isn't it an addictive blog?

    Your description of blood without using the word, very good. The whole scene is one big question, and it leaves me longing for an answer, like the start of a detective story. Maybe you should write it? Hmmmmm... Peace, Amy Barlow Liberatore, and here's my take on the prompt: http://sharplittlepencil.com/2012/03/30/1955-trifecta-disturbing-photo-included/

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    1. Thank you Amy, both for stopping by and for the response. It is appreciated! Yes, Trifecta, and Trifextra are both addictive, and they capture my attention even when I am attempting to ignore the world... that's pretty impressive! ;-)

      I went by your blog and read your post, actually I did several times (took guests with me a few times). It was captivating, and carried out well, though the picture was a bit distracting, it most certainly added to the text.

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  9. That first line was so perfect, so strong, I don't even know what to say other than that I enjoyed reading it over and over.
    Came from the Trifextra linkup.

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    1. That's a great compliment, thank you Kim. I really like the 33 word constraints. (and the 100 word song challenge) hehehhe... I went by and read your 100 word song response, and it was great. You really captured the essence of both need, and innocence in one fell swoop. Nice job!

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  10. So many questions brought up with this piece. Nice job.

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    1. Thank you Carrie. I wonder what questions it brought to your mind :-)

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  11. What does the sign say? Is it a subtle instruction or simpple distraction from the disurbing scene? Very good.

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    1. It is part of where the secret to Mickey's knowledge is revealed. Thank you for the visit!

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  12. Thanks so much for linking up with Trifecta this week. Hope to see you back on Monday (10 am Eastern) for the new prompt and some exciting news about the changes Trifecta is making to spread the word about our writing community.

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    1. I will definitely have to see what you are heading for next. I have always enjoyed your challenges :-) Thank you for stopping by to see what the prompt produced from me.

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  13. This is a great little mystery/thriller. It didn't scream "horror" at me, but it was really very well crafted. I love the phrase "he wasn't sacrificing words."

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    1. True enough, it is more mystery/thriller. I guess it's more my style, I will have to be more careful with prompts if I am going to let them stretch my boundaries.

      Thank you so much for stopping by.

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