Glimpses

Wednesday, August 22, 2012

Going My Way? (Scriptic)

 
Mark was ecstatic when the twins were born, each with their blonde curls and blue eyes brought a spark of life, of happiness to his mundane existence. He had no idea that being a father would bring such joy into his world. Side by side, most people could not tell the girls apart, but even though they were identical twins, Hope and Faith had expressions that were unique, and that's how Mark told the two of them apart from the beginning. 

Mark delighted in their first steps, first words, and any other first he could record with his video camera in hand; the twins would be immortalized on video. His wife, Taylor, called him obsessive, but she was the first to offer to make popcorn so they could share his latest series of shots. Things were good.

All the way through grade school, Faith, and Hope wore matching clothes, and hair styles. They walked to, and from, school together; they were content to be with one another. They shared everything, friends, ideas, music, a bedroom, and even their bathroom, but that all changed when Chad Hornwick came into the picture. 

Chad was a tall boy who was good at math and didn't like sports. He kept to himself most of the time, but had taken a liking to spending time with the twins. He started walking them home from school in the eighth grade, and driving them home during their freshman year of high school. 

When the girls hit puberty, they both started to change. Faith began wearing her hair really short, and dyed it hot pink, with blue tips. Hope wore hers waist length, most of the time in braids. Faith's makeup was reminiscent of the 80's punk era, with dramatic dark eyes, while Hope wore none. Their lives had become diametrically opposed. 

"See ya' Dad, we're going to the park with Chad." Faith yelled from the front door.

"Okay, be home before it gets dark."

Faith mumbled a "yeah whatever," as she tossed her backpack over her shoulder.

"We will be," Hope replied.

They were good girls Mark would say to his friends; they never caused a bit of trouble, always did their homework, and helped out around the house. 

"So, which park are you taking us to, Chad? Hope asked, as she pushed a pink ball cap over her head, to keep her hair from blowing all over in the convertible. 

"We're going to Chesney," Chad said.

"Chesney? Isn't that over 200 miles away?" Hope said.

Faith turned from the front seat to face her sister who was sitting in the back. "It sure is Miss Goody Two-Shoes! Do you have a problem with that?" Faith asked.

"Well we told Dad we would be home by dark, but there is no way we can get to Chesney from here and back again before then," Hope said.

Chad and Faith were laughing. "You told dad we would be back, I never said that," said Faith.

Hope did not like defying her parents' wishes, but Faith was a bit of a rebel. Hope knew that it wouldn't do any good to say something to her sister now, she had already decided where they were going. A thick, sweet smell rolled up over the seat, even with the top down. 

"What is that smell?" Hope asked.

"Smell? What are you talking about?" Chad said as he passed a blunt to Faith.

"There's a weird smell, it's really strong. I can't believe you don't smell it too."

Chad laughed as he took another toke off the blunt, and passed it again to Faith. "Nope, don't smell a thing."

Faith started laughing too, so hard she couldn't stop. 

"What is so damned funny?" Hope asked. She felt like she was in the backseat of another world, instead of the same car with Faith and Chad. 

Before they could answer her, Chad slammed on the brakes to avoid the oncoming truck. He didn't quite make it. A loud roar ripped through the air as the semi smashed into Chad's car. The car flipped over, and then slid down the interstate like a shuffle board puck, upside down. 

It was almost dark when the ambulance arrived. Blue, and red lights flashed, a quarter mile either direction from the car. Chad was found unconscious, 40 feet from where the car landed; he had been thrown from the car when the truck hit them. It was several hours later, before they were able to pry the bodies of Faith, and Hope from the wreckage. 

Mark's happiness was drained that night, as he let go of his Faith, and Hope forever.
 

 
For the Scriptic.org prompt exchange this week, FlamingNyx at http://flamingnyx.wordpress.com gave me this prompt: One thing to give up to be happy: hope. Oh, and there is another: faith.

I gave Michael at Http://MichaelWebb.us this prompt: Marshmallows in the snow
 
 
 
Images used in this blog are either mine, or come from Morguefiles unless indicated otherwise.
 

16 comments:

  1. God. This ay too close to home. I know two people who died just like that.

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    1. Sorry Sandra, I had to get my writing shoes back on, and this was what came of this prompt. HugZ~

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  2. Such a powerful story. My stomach flipped along with the car. It was way too close for me too, having two kids who drive themselves everywhere.

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    1. Anyone who is, or has been a parent, will feel some type of emotion at the thought of losing one they love. Thank you for reading it Tara, and for responding.

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  3. Excellent and horrid all at once, exactly as a story of this nature should be.

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    1. Thank you Jo. It is definitely not a "happily ever after" tale. Though I really like them, this is what the prompt led me to. Thank you much for reading.

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  4. This was as good as it was devastating. Losing both must have crushed him, losing one twice must have made it even harder to bear.

    Damned good authoring m'dear - your writing shoes are firmly laced and ready to run.

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    1. Thank you t~ I have been such a hermit writer, I thought it was a good opportunity to stretch out and give those legs a lift. I always appreciate your feedback.

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  5. Brilliant story. I especially like the play on words of your last line about losing Faith and Hope. That my friend was spot on pure genius.

    Kathy
    http://gigglingtruckerswife.blogspot.com

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    1. Thank you Kathy! I'm glad you enjoyed the play. :-)

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  6. Wow ... I am glad it is just a fiction. Sad ending but beautifully written!

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    1. I really appreciate your visit. Thank you for the feedback :-)

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  7. So sad and totally unexpected! Thats good writing!

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  8. So sad and tragic. Now, the father's life will change again in a more painful way. It is a mystery how people who have been raised the same way turns out so different. The ending was unexpected. Very well done, K.

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    1. Thank you Imelda. It is an interesting thing to see how the perception of various people adds to their personality.

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