It's new for me to write as the story plays out, in some ways it becomes the rough draft that no one usually sees, while the pieces come together (and fall apart) through each connected word. I will consider this a personal course in courage, as I continue to share with you the story that is writing itself.
Outside In
"Blake, your soup is
getting cold!" his aunt hollered from the other room. "Come and
eat."
Even though he heard her, it
took a few moments before he could pull himself away from the window. Blake
spent a lot of time in his own head. The canyon of separation from the world
around him and that place that he finds comfort inside, kept him safe.
"Blake, come and eat!"
She half-shouted, head cornering the door jamb into the sitting room with wild
strands.
Blake was only six when his
mother left, but he remembers her face of soft, ivory skin, with a natural pale
blush on her full lips and high cheeks. Her hands were small, but he memorized the
way they felt against his face, like sun-warmed silk, after the story, before
sleep. "Dream, little angel" she would whisper as she flipped off the
light.
"Can I go outside after
lunch Aunt Torie?" feet shuffled across the floor as if they were bags of
rocks, his head lowered denying her eye contact.
"It's raining. You know
you can't go out in the rain." she tousled his thick hair under her
fingers. She wished she could reach him. It had already been two years, she
wondered how long it would take to see the vivacious child she used to watch.
He was a different person then. Summer caught him and kept him until the sun
went down, day after day. Laughter spilled over the fence into the neighbors
yard, bringing other curious sun-catchers into his world. So much laughter,
hidden somewhere inside his mind.
ewwww...it's gettin' gooooood! Keep going!
ReplyDeleteThank you Jo... motivation is at a high!
DeleteCan't wait to read more!
ReplyDeleteThank you Kat, I will keep the words churning!
DeleteWell written!
ReplyDeleteThank you Claudia.
DeleteI loved that description of his mom. Wonderful!
ReplyDeleteThank you very much Lydia:-)
Deletefantastic, can't wait to read more!
ReplyDeleteThank you Sylvia... I will continue to write... and I hope you continue to read:-)
DeleteLeft me hanging....love it
ReplyDeleteYay! That's a good sign. :-) Thank you for coming by here.
Deletegreat idea, k. i like that you will write as you feel it.
ReplyDeleteintriguing beginning....
I am sure enjoying the process d~ I can feel Blake with me all day, every day. Some times I wake up from sleep with things I have seen in my mind, and have to write. It's fascinating!
DeleteWonderful skill of describing the mother :D Write on...
ReplyDeleteThank you Feathered Pen.
DeleteYou've got a special gift for this!
ReplyDeleteThank you Beth :-)
DeleteThank you so much Ladies... I appreciate you all!
ReplyDeleteInteresting. Almost poetic.
DeleteJoyce
http://joycelansky.blogspot.com/
Wait...this is it? I WANT MORE!!!!
ReplyDeleteI'm already feeling sorry for Blake....and that lonely place he spends his time.
Ah Larry, I will continue to write, until the story is complete :-) Just keep checking back!
DeleteI dunno, I think I'm happier living in my head most of the time, so I can understand the lad. I am looking forward to reading more about him though :o)
ReplyDeleteThanks MoJo :-) I am working on him quietly in hidden spaces for now ;-)
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