Gates of Eden~
Tonight I succumb to strange realms
accompanied with grace,
suited in Eden's attire
to drink of mirrored love.
Her reflection shares
green eyes watered down with time
lips parted in a downward smile
speaking in riddled whispers
of rainfall,
and smoky clouds.
Black-eyed Susan stares
over white pickets
into oblivion
while she combs pine needles
from her hair
and counts the pennies tossed
upon the water.
Wishes apples weren't so sweet.
© k~
This post is part of the
A-Z Challenge 2012.
Now this was excellent!!
ReplyDeleteCheers, Jenn
http://www.wine-n-chat.com
:-) Thank you Jenn.
DeleteWell done, k. Well done.
ReplyDeleteThank you d~ :-)
DeleteBeautiful imagery--lovely and mysterious.
ReplyDeleteOoHhHh mysterious, I love that!
DeleteThat is a picture in words. Beautifully done, my friend.
ReplyDeletesmiles Thank you for such a wonderful compliment Jo.
DeleteMagnificent!
ReplyDeleteThank you Amy :-)
DeleteThis is beautiful: "Her reflection shares
ReplyDeletegreen eyes watered down with time
lips parted in a downward smile
speaking in riddled whispers
of rainfall,
and smoky clouds.
Black-eyed Susan"
I like how this is wistful but stong at the same time. It's just beautiful.
Thank you for pointing out which part of this you liked the most. :-)
DeleteBeautiful flow. I'm not sure what you meant, but the words are pretty.
ReplyDeleteCatch My Words
http://joycelansky.blogspot.com/2012/04/atoz-good-golly.html
Hahah... well I guess that's the nature of poetry. Sometimes you do, sometimes you don't. I could explain it to you, but that would take away part of the fun. ;-)
DeleteThis feels very sensual and yet also very sweet and innocent. I like it!
ReplyDeletePoetry allows a bit of freedom when it comes to expressing emotions. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thank you for stopping by!
DeleteAbsolutely brilliant!!
ReplyDeleteKathy
http://gigglingtruckerswife.blogspot.com/
Why thank you Kathy :-)
DeleteWonderful write! I enjoyed your imagery~
ReplyDeleteI wrote poetry, too
Thank you Ella, I will be stopping by there to see what you do too :-)
DeleteHi Kiddo, I am trying to add folks to the blog roll and I THINK I have just successfully added you..sorry for the delay...thanks for posting at Poets United:)
ReplyDeleteThank you Sherry :-)
DeleteThanks for stopping by! I'm still kind of fumbling around on my personal blog and still hopeful I'll find a rhythm soon. lol But I'm also tackling this project on two blogs, as I see are you, and the other blog is going very well. So I can't complain. :o)
ReplyDeleteBeautiful word painting!
It was my pleasure. I am sure you will find a rhythm, it just takes a bit of time and exploration. I don't know what possessed me to do two of them my first run at it, but I did! Though with both of them poetry, it does make it a bit easier than I had expected :-)
DeleteThank you, and thank you for stopping by here too!
k,
ReplyDeleteYep, I bet she still "Wishes apples weren't so sweet".
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Chances are you are correct Dawn ;-)
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