This week's 100 Word Song challenge inspiration is Laguna Coil "Deep Within" chosen for Lance and Leeroy by Frelle.
Lillie's life was changed on the way
to a friend's wedding, in ways she has yet to discover. This is a
continuing story about Lillie through the 100 Word Song Challenge. Last
weeks 100 words are here, and the story in its entirety can be found here.
A few sputters on the radio ended the music that had been
playing.
Cascading brilliance spilled over the edge of Lillie's
shoulders where raven hair once fell. All at once she realized she hadn't been
hungry for 4 dark days. A flash of light took her voice and tucked it deep
within. In stifling silence, she reached to touch Trevor. A chill ran up his
spine.
The dream had become her, the darkness was taking over. She curled up
between the body that betrayed her, and Trevor's warmth, closed her deep eyes
and waited.
"Come now into this dark goodnight."
Nooo...happy ending please. I read the entire story, it is very charming. I hope Lillie comes back.
ReplyDeleteThank you for your input, and for reading the entire story. Lillie's going through some changes, but there is more to come ;-)
DeleteI am REALLY starting to think that Lillie and my (as of yet) unamed lead character will/should be meeting up in short order.
ReplyDeletePersonally, I can't wait...
Now wouldn't that be a fun twist ;-)
DeleteYou use great language here. Excellent story. Love the post.
ReplyDeleteThank you for taking the time to read it. :-)
DeleteK- I'm off to read the rest. This has pulled me in. The last line is chilling. Great job!
ReplyDelete:-) Thank you Mags, that's a great compliment. If the short ones can get your attention, hopefully the full story will keep it.
Deletebeautifully done. I love the visuals and the intensity!!
ReplyDeleteThank you Jenna, it is proving to be a good exercise in keeping the pace, and the 100 words. :-)
DeleteI liked the imagery of this line...
ReplyDelete'A flash of light took her voice and tucked it deep within..'
I second Jenna's comments, the visuals in the short write and the longer story are extraordinary. As you are poet you've mastered creating big moving pictures in a short spans of time. I quite like the name, Lillie.
Thank you Brenda, it's been a fun challenge on a weekly basis. I like the way it sounds when you say "mastered creating big moving pictures" for short spans, thank you for that. :-)
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