Glimpses

Wednesday, June 20, 2012

A Grey Night





 
 
This week's 100 Word Song challenge inspiration is Dave Mathew's - "Grey Street" chosen for Lance and Leeroy by Eric from Jen Has a Pen.

 
 
 
 





Lillie's life was changed on the way to a friend's wedding, in ways she has yet to discover. This is a continuing story about Lillie through the 100 Word Song Challenge. Last weeks 100 words are here, and the story in its entirety can be found here.

 
 
 
 



 A Grey Night

"Here we are Lillie," Trevor said as he toted her body to the blue, grey water's edge. 

The rainbow that poured itself from a night sky into the dark water was beautifully out of place. Trevor settled into the soft bank of the river where he let Lillie's bare feet dangle in the water. 

"Lillie, It's time to wake up now," he said as he brushed her hair to the side, and let his lips press her face. She was warm, and smelled like sun-dried linen and fresh coconut. His lips brushed their way across her cheek, to her mouth.

 
 
 
 

12 comments:

  1. OK - you know how I said everyone needs a Trevor in their liife? Yeah, well now I'm starting to rethink that. He's sort of creeping me out a touch =]

    This is getting better and better by the week!

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    1. heheheh... Yeah, I imagine that Lillie might feel the same way if she were awake t. :-)

      Thank you for reading each week, and letting me know what you think.

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  2. Very creepy indeed, especially with the photo you chose!

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    1. I created that photo Kat ;-) to go along with the story. Thank you for reading!

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  3. Yeah, it's taking a very creepy turn. But, it's a 'gotta read more' sort of story too.

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    1. That's a good thing Tara, the "gotta read more" part :-)

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  4. I would use the word intriquing over creepy. They're some deep dakr stuff coming or at least implied that makes this story have depth.

    Digging the characters. The way you wrap them with heart is superb.

    more please..excellent 100

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    1. Thank you for the shift in adjectives Lance. I can see how it might creep some people out, but it is his unspoken love for her that feeds the fire witnessed.

      :-) I may have to supplement, next Tuesday is a long way from here!

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  5. I've finally caught up with the story. I hope Lillie wakes up and be the same person. But this installment hints at some darkness. I look forward to the nest piece.

    ~Imelda

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    1. Thank you for making the effort Imelda :-)

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  6. I got all caught up on the story and I have to say I LOVE it! This 100 is so tender and so full of love I can feel Trevor's Pain and longing for Lillie.

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    1. Thank you Debbie, it's fast becoming one I am looking forward to writing each week too. Much more so when I can share it with people who are also enjoying it. Thank you for your comments :-)

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