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Sunday, January 22, 2012

Poolside (BFF160)

The BFF 160 challenge is to write a story in under 300 words which includes a character, conflict, and resolution. Let's get started!

Short Story (Under 300 Words)


Poolside
Hot sun poured out on the concrete surrounding the pool. She sat in a chair a few feet from the water's edge. Anxiety rushed up through her body, it was the third day of her vacation and she had not yet braved the water. She wanted to swim, but had not since her little brother drowned when she was just a child. 

A splash jarred her from her thoughts. A small body was flailing in the water. No one noticed, but her. Fear mingled with memories. Visions flashed between the lake, her little brother, and the pool. She was terrified, frozen both in the past and present. Her lead-like body was an anchor to the chair. There was no time to contemplate. 

She jumped in.

Water went over her head, threatening to steal her breath. Her arms reached out to the little girl, and pulled her close. She lifted the child's face above the water and swam to the edge. Hot concrete greeted her bare feet. She wrapped a towel around the small girl, and herself. 

Whatever fear had strangled her, it was not as great as her desire to save the child that now snuggled up to her poolside.

8 comments:

  1. Amazing! Perfect! Breathtaking! Oh, and I liked it a lot.♥

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  2. Amazing what instinct will force us to face. Nice job on the challenge :o)

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    1. Sometimes fear is conquered by a larger one. ;-)

      Thank you!

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  3. Incredible write!! I loved this!! Thanks so much for sharing this!!

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  4. I saw what you did there.... And it was GREAT!!! Kudos

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    1. Thanks Darlene! I enjoyed this assignment a lot. It challenged my brain.

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